Selasa, 16 Februari 2016

the 3 climbers



The Three Climbers

There are 3 boy with the same hobby. Their hobby is climbing mountains. They often to do it together. They have climbed many mountains together. One day they decided to climb Mount Everest because it is the only major mountain that they haven’t climbed yet. They make the plans but they don’t tell anyone that they were about to climb Mount Everest. They knew that it was dangerous and they still wanted to do it.

After a few days, they went there and climb it.They begin to climb the mountain in the morning. They climb and climb until the afternoon, one climber fell down. Fortunately there were a ledge. He was helped by the ledge. Because of that, he broke his leg. He still continue his journey. The day almost dark. They take a rest and spend a night in the mountain. The temperatue was so cold. The injured man becomes ill.
They spent an uncomfortable night in the mountain. They waited until the sun comes up and they were trying to attract the attention from the helicopters. Finally, in the noon, one helicopter saw them. They were rescued and the injured man was carried to the nearest hospital immediately.





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2 komentar:

  1. I think your composition is great and i found no grammar mistake but i suggest that you could add more pictures

    BalasHapus
  2. Be careful with the singular plural, such as 3 hobbies, not hobby.
    Be consistent with Present and Past is a must since it can trigger your readers' confusion.

    I always think you have a writing talent. The flow is always good and the ideas that you emphasize quite exciting, too. Kepp up your good work.

    BalasHapus